You encouraged me to drop my tunnel vision and to be aware of different ways to see (re-vision) my book. You pointed out that it was a series of episodes rather than a complete story. You helped me tighten it by raising a peripheral character to a major one, forcing my protagonist to act rather than react. Thanks for reminding me to always ask how each scene serves the story.
My goodness, Stacy,
What a thorough and thoughtful critique. I see your points, and am so glad to have some kind of master plan to implement. You not only gave an overall, big-picture critique, but you also looked at grammar, passive verb forms, etc. Your suggestions for sample biographies to read will give me a good idea of the different ways in which I might structure mine. Again, thanks for your expertise.
Your query coaching really paid off! A positive response to a query is just one small step, of course. But I feel as though I'd know how to query effectively the next time.
Thanks for helping me to compose a good one.